It was a pleasure to receive my feedback from Simon, my tutor, yesterday; this course has been a journey, and this feedback has illustrated the progress I have made. Simon’s feedback is positive and encouraging pointing out how I can improve on the submission while also giving me encouragement that in general the assignment has gone well.
Simon has not only given pointers about images I should reconsider in rework, but he has also given me a lot of pointers towards how I should consider presenting the images.
I thought that I had made it clear in my notes that the images were arranged in a particular way to show the journey across the harbor on the ferry. The initial images are the stars that are in the funnel of the boats to introduce the subject leading to timetable showing the direction of travel and finally onto the vessel itself.
I believe Simon is right about the last image, the ferry, everyone who has been to Hong Kong has that pictures, and I think in hindsight it isn’t 100% necessary to show the ferries sense of location.
I also agree with the comments about image 5 – doesn’t show anything unique the Star Ferry. This is an image I would look to replace the picture mentioned above.
Image 6 – understand Simons comment, however, to me there is more to this image that the signage, there is the lights on Hong Kong island in the background that help, set a sense of place to the overall image set. Again with image 7 the “normalness” of the passengers is what I am trying to portray, there is nothing quirky about the passengers on the ferry – it is just a practical way to get to from Central to Tsim Sha Tsui.
This first step to polish and rework this image is to look for alternative images; there were some pictures that I wanted to include originally that I was conflicted about leaving out – these will be my first considerations. I will have then look at the presentation style of the assignment and some accompanying captions for the images to help with the context of the set.
In addition to the assignment rework, there are a couple of areas with my coursework mainly ex 5.2 and ex 5.3 where I need to review and revise my work.