Assignment 2 of this course as you will have seen in the prevoius post was originally an unmitigated disaster, littered with spelling and grammar errors. Unformed opinions with no back up from literature and where literature was referred to it was poorly referenced which could have lead to all kinds of issues with plagiarism.
with going too far over old ground I reworked through in line with comments from my tutor to get a much more structured and coherent piece of work, however was time when on a further research was carried out I felt that it required a little bit more what tutor calls oomph in arrears and yesterdays post is the second rework.
The rework includes:
- a more succinct title, that reflects the subject matter better;
- clearer more focused and referred opening paragraph, without throw-away openning statement;
- more focus toward censorship;
- a more appropriate example of films using metaphor referenced from academic literature, not a website
- more appropriate reflection on how the French New Wave influenced later films with specific examples
Overall I am much happier with this version of the essay, and it is a million miles from what was submitted in October/ November.