Again tutor feedback on Assignment 4 from my tutor Andrew was very encouraging, the progress I had had since Assignment 2 was being maintained. Andrew highlighted as that again there was some throw away wasteful sentences that did not help the essay and as with assignment 3 although it was generally good it could be stronger in a couple of key areas. Mainly the very generalised term that the film could be seen as feminist and that to expand on few concepts that gender is not necessarily binary and Ripley in Aliens being role reversal character.
Andrew recommended a couple of books:
David Gauntlett’s – An Introduction to Media and Identity
Rosalind Gill – Gender and the Media
These were quite helpful in fleshing out some of the ideas with the original essay and on rereading and Andrew was quite right that the ending was far too “mushy”. Also overall the structure of the essay on re-reading in light of Andrews comment and some initial changes felt clunky therefore one of the major changes in this re-work was switching the first and second section to give the essay a better flow.
This final draft I feel is much more considered, easier for the reader, and focus more how we a society should be looking away from the heteronormative world of the 20th century.
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