Although not formally assessed thought that it was appropriate to return to the original essay and re-write it in a much more academic way.
Demonstration of subject-based knowledge and understanding.
This is a simple rework picking up on my tutor’s original comment and simple reworking my initial ideas with a better understanding of wider literature.
The essay focus on Genre and some auteur theory using specific examples from with the film
Demonstration of research skill
Clearly over the initial essay, this is much improved with a clear bibliography and references to a wider research of literature.
Demonstration of critical and Evaluation skills
The reworked essay follows key areas common to all three movies and focus on comparing the styles of Leone and Kurosawa, how they both play homage to the traditional western,
The passage regarding score is a little light, however, I wanted this to be touched on but was restricted by word count and it does “hang” without giving the reading fulfilment but it does pose further question to inspire a reader.
Communication
Overall this much better structured essay which I hope the assessor will enjoy reading compared to the random eclectic collection of ideas and personal thoughts thrown together in the first draft.