The feedback I have received from my tutor on assignment 1 is rather pleasing and helpful for going forward. Andrew, my tutor, has given me an encouraging evaluation of the essay while illustrating the many weaknesses.
In summary, I have made some observation points in my analysis of the five films, however, due to my inexperience with academic writing has shone through especially with the lack of referencing, casual style of writing and as consequence of the absence of the referencing a lack of evidence of background reading.
Lack of appropriate background reading was lacking, the essay and idea came mainly “from within in” and I have failed to follow this up wth wider reading, relying primarily on my thoughts, internet reading and the course reader by Amy Villarejo. This means as Andrew has pointed out that I have not followed through on points and the essay reads like a list of bullets points and have missed on writing about the grammar of the films.
A lot of my problem was the lack of available appropriate literature a following on from Andrews Feedback I have purchased:
Introduction to Film Studies
The Oxford History of World Cinema
How To Read a Film: Movies, Media, and Beyond
‘Have You Seen…?’: a Personal Introduction to 1,000 Films including masterpieces, oddities and guilty pleasures (with just a few disasters)